Your thesis is great and it gets right to the point, but you're absolutely correct. I agree that you need something more to make it specific, but your problem is not the aspect of the educational definition. You could explain what educational is in your body paragraph-probably your intro?
I think what your thesis needs is for you to tell us why the law should be reformed? What is it that you want to persuade us about?
* I hope this helped Chong...Best of luck on your paper =)
